- Much better in terms of context; More in depth, examples.and theories....
EBI:
- Almost no focus on the question
- How many times did you use the word trust?
- Still need more theories/examples
2) Read through the mark scheme. Of the six different statements, write which you think is currently your strongest and which is weakest. Explain WHY and, for the weakest, what you are going to do to improve in that area.
- Statics
- Good arguments
- Good points
3) Read through the exemplar A grade essay. What does this essay offer that yours does not? Identify THREE things you can take from this essay to improve your own responses in future.
The exemplar essay has a lot more statistics and quotes in it to make it a better essay whereas mine didn't have any of them. Also, there is a solid use of theories in the whole essay. In addition to this there was also a good and balanced argument in this essay which is something that my essay lacked in.
4) Write ONE new paragraph for your January assessment essay. Ideally, this should be a section you did not cover in your original essay. This paragraph needs to be comprehensive and meet the criteria for Level 4 of the mark scheme.
With developments in new and digital media it has made it very difficult for the consumer to know who to trust, The reason for this is because there are too many different sources, views and values available to us which would make it harder for us to know who is reliable and trustworthy. These developments has made traditional media suffer hugely. This is evident from the following statistic " Over the past few years the newspaper industry has been losing 13.5% of sales per year from 2010 to 2014"
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